My name is Guo-Wen Zeng, coming from Tainan . I have five members in my family. My father is a business manager in a company about glass industry and my mother is a housewife. Both of my parents are democratic. As long as things or problems that I have capability to solve, they always let me make my own master. Because of the way they teach me, I become more independent than those who are of my age. As for my elder sister, who majors in accounting, always tells me to be responsibility for the thing I promised. Her motto is “The person who doesn’t keep his word will never become an adult.” In my family, my brother and I are the youngest children because we are twins. On account of him, my childhood is very happy for that we always do things together. I’m really satisfied with what I have now. Because of them, I become a positive and energetic person.
(第6行)是be responsible for,rsponsibility是名詞
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其他沒問題囉:D
你姊姊學會計跟教你要有責任又沒關係 你要不要改成節省之類的
回覆刪除最後面那個童年是不是要用過去式??
On account of him, my childhood is very happy for that we always do things together這句感覺很像因為你和你的brother常常在一起所以你的童年很快樂,要不要說你們做過哪些事情﹝ex.抓泥鰍之類的XD﹞讓你的童年很豐富很快樂
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