There are two important Americans, John Adams and Thomas Jefferson. By reading their biographical information, I found that they were similar. In spite of the difference of their birthday, but both of them died on July 4, 1826. In John Adams's life, he was an important person in the Amerocan Revolution, and so was Thomas Jefferson. Then, they were great presidents in U.S.A's history. The former was the second president, the later was the third. Next, they were all delegate to the Continental Congress. Last, both of them are the singers of Declaration of Independence. They were really outstanding people that I thought they were giants in the U.S.A's history.
前面要空兩格唷!
回覆刪除but both of them 的both可以不要嗎?感覺怪怪的
然後是latter(後者)
是both delegate,all是用於三者以上
the later →the latter
回覆刪除they were all delegate to the Continental Congress
all 改成both
其他沒問題
Then, they were great presidents in U.S.A's history.(加個both會比較好吧!)
回覆刪除all (是用在三者以上喔)
singers(是signers吧!你要聽他們唱歌喔!)
問題上面大致上都說過了=ˇ=
回覆刪除Next, they were all~ all 好像是要用三個人改both吧
回覆刪除1.In spite of the difference of their birthday, 1.but both of them died on July 4, 1826.
回覆刪除but要去掉，but是連接詞，要連接兩個句子喲!而且你前面也已經有用in spite of 了!
2.later→latter
3.the U.S.A.'s history → American history
(妳可以去cambridge字典查查，我有在那看見!)
4.they were all delegate to the Continental Congress.
all→both
were delegated to 要加d(委託;委派...為代表)
例如:Bill was delegated to fetch the manager.
或你要把delegate加上s，因為delegate也可以當"可數名詞"，解釋為"代表"!
今天才知道原來giant 可以當"偉人"的意思~
In spite of the difference of their birthday, but both of them died on July 4, 1826.
回覆刪除應去掉but
U.S.A's history這樣怪怪的~
The former was the second president, the later was the third.
latter拼錯然後應該要有連接詞~
第七行第一個字singers應該拼錯了XD
那是歌手欸哈哈應該是signers吧~~~
哈哈是signers我跟你ㄧ樣都寫singer
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