I'm looking for my friend. Her name is Vivian Li. She is twenty years old and has beautiful long hair which is brown. Today is her birthday so I planned to celebrate her birthday at restaurant. Everything was fine in the beginning, but when I went to the restroom and back, I found she was missing. Her cellphone and bag were on the table, but she was not there. I was afraid that she was getting into some troubles. She wears yellow dress with flower patterns. Her skin is a littie black and she has beautiful brown eyes. Her is 160 cm. But she wears yellow high-heeled shoes today, maybe now she becomes 165cm or so. Her nickname is "Kitty" because Hello Kitty is her favorite cartoon character. She has a Hello Kitty necklace on her neck. I'm really worried about her. Therefore, if someone sees her, please call me. My phone number is 0978-123456. God bless her.
前後時態有點亂!!
回覆刪除不然基本上都寫的很好
1)Today is her birthday so I planned to celebrate her birthday at restaurant.時態不一樣哦
回覆刪除2)Her is 160 cm. 是She is 160 cm.
第二行最後at後面要加a或者the吧 restaurant是可數的
回覆刪除Her is 160 cm 主詞是She吧!
其他描述都還蠻完整的
at restaurant要不要加個冠詞之類的??
回覆刪除back如果是作"回來"的意思的話是副詞喔~前面要加動詞
(動詞的意思是倒退)
第六行應該是She is 160 cm in height.
其他沒什麼問題了
第三行開頭restaurant前面+個a吧~
回覆刪除第四行開頭back前面要加came哦~
第五行dress可數的話要+a
第六行後面應該是"She" is 160 ...
Today is ~at restaurant. 蕊斯特亂前要加a
回覆刪除Everything was ~but when I~把特 輝恩中間要不要加個something happened
Her is 160 cm.應該是She
回覆刪除然後but when I went to the restroom ~~~這句好像怪怪的
其他都不錯
第一句改成long brown hair 就好了
回覆刪除at "a" restaurant
went to the restroom and back 怪怪的..要再加上動詞
後半段的時態跟要前面統一!!