Discussing Cause - 2 - revised

There are several reasons why this music store was out of business.  First, there were two large music stores 3 miles away from shopping center.  Therefore, this small store wouldn’t have customers because people like to shop at large stores for the price of CDs’ may be cheaper than those at the small store.  Second, most of the CDs there were hip-hop and rock that people living there might not like; hence, I thought Mr. Williams should buy different types of music for customers to choose such as classical music, folk music and so on.  Third, the shop was open Monday to Friday from 1 to 5 p.m.  In fact, people usually do shopping on weekends or Friday night rather than on weekdays.  Finally, Mr. Williams’ s shop wouldn’t accept checks or credit cards that may keep those who usually pay money by checks or credit cards from buying CDs at this shop.  These were why Mr. Williams closed his shop. If Mr. Williams wanted to open another shop, I thought he should do more preparations before opening the shop.