My father is an amateur of coffee. He usually drinks two cups of coffee every day. However, when he is busy with his work, he will drink more than three. According to the research, people drink a moderate amount of caffeine won’t cause any harm. In contrast, if you ingest more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven cups of coffee). There are several negative effects which harm your health. First, drinking coffee will make you feel energetic. But if you drink too much, you may get insomnia which keeps you from sleeping and you will feel nervousness and anxiety because you can’t sleep. Second, your heart will beat fast or irregular owing to ingesting caffeine more than people need in a day. Third, caffeine may irritate your stomach so that you may feel nausea or have other gastrointestinal problems which make you uncomfortable. Due to all of these reasons, I think drinking too much caffeine is not a good habitual behavior. Maybe I should suggest my father stop drinking more than three cups of coffee, or he will get a lot of harm from it.
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回覆刪除第七行you will feel nervousness and anxiety 錯了，feel後面要接形容詞所以是nervous and anxious
if you ingest more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven cups of coffee).感覺句子還沒結束
回覆刪除feel nervousness and anxiety
-->feel nervous and anxious
I should suggest my father stop
--> I should suggest my father stopping
文意通順~用字也很準確
you will feel nervousness and anxiety (nervous and anxious, 打完才發現上面都打了，太過分了!!)
回覆刪除In contrast, if you ingest more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven cups of coffee).(and then?)
nausea 他也是名詞，不能放在feel後
*Second, your heart will beat fast or irregular owing to ingesting caffeine more than people need in a day.(owing to 前面加個,八)
回覆刪除*In contrast, if you ingest more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven cups of coffee).沒打完，是八?
*I should suggest "that" my father (should)stop~.
people drink a moderate amount of caffeine won’t cause any harm.兩個動詞衝突到了吧...
回覆刪除you will feel nervousness and anxiety
feel後面接形容詞比較好吧
In contrast, ~ 是不是有少?
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